帮我看下下面的这段英文有没有错误

帮我看下下面的这段英文有没有错误
Those failures in computer mainframes and datas as well as upgrading or transferring
manufacturing system datas are all will result in the discontinual operation of
enterprises’ core businesses.Which put enterprises into big trouble,includes
the loses of earnings and customers and long-term effect on enterprises’reputation.
Customers must take sovereign remedy so as to achieve the high availability of
system.
Previous high availability solution are all selected the shared-disk
arrays as the facility to save core business datas,for example,Oracle database’s high availability solution which the background business database
system adopted (high availability solution in standby mode are discussed here and applications based on
Oracle load balancing technique are not included) will put the Oracle database
into shared-disk arrays to ensure the persistent and integrity
of businesses and datas.However,the weakness of this solution is that there
are no protection schemes offered to these core business datas and there is
something wrong with shared-disk arrays,system may not provide high
availability security in
short time.
Rose provides two-node high availability method which based
on pure soft copy technology,Rose can copy the
core business datas to standby units in real time and achieve the redundancy
backup,thus,avoid the disastrous consequences which may result from the
missing of core business datas.Rose also offer careful monitoring mechanism to
ensure high availability of entire application system solution.No matter where
the fault is,hosts,datas or in the process of transferring datas and upgrading
systems,it can also ensure the high availability of businesses and dataseffectively.

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