帮我修改一下英语论文,主要是一些语法的错误,词用得不准确,语句不通的.

帮我修改一下英语论文,主要是一些语法的错误,词用得不准确,语句不通的.
Should student be allowed to bring their own laptop to school
I think student should not bring their own laptop to school.Computers are widelyused by people today,and it's changing our life.people use them to study,watch videos and play games.Comuputer can also help students.Students can search the information and data for their study and do some on-line interactive on the internet.So.should student be allowed to bring laptop to school?
I think student shouldn't bring laptop to school because:1.bring their own influence study.2.student,nendn't bring them.3.Student might compare the prise of their computer.
Infulence study:I did some research on internet about how do university student use their laptop computer,and it shows:Most of the student spend 2 hours or more to watch movies,listen to music,play games and read novels by using their computers,although their original intension is study.Some of them indulge themselves in playing on-line games.Over 90% of students go to bed at 12pmor later.The college student do so,what's more,we are just middle school student.We should ask ourselves:can we control it?
I think student needn't bring their laptop to school because:students can ask the teachers or classmates if they have a problem in study.They can solve the problem easily.Don't need to use computer.
Student might compare the prise and value of their computers,and it's bad for relationships of students.And it might bring a corrupt moral to school.
Computers did bring lots of goods to us,butstudy is the most important things to do at school,we can use computer at home.Because bring laptop computers to school intluence study,we needn't bring them,it might bring corrupt moral to school,so that's why I think students should not be allowed to bring their own laptop to school.（请大家把改的地方标出来，

Should student(s) be allowed to bring laptops to school(?)
I DON'T think student(S) should bring laptop(S) to school.
Computers are WILDLY used by people NOWADAYS,WHICH HAS BEEN changing our life.People use COMPUTERS to study,watch videos and play games.ComuputerS can also help students ON SO MANY THINGS.Students can search information and OBTAIN data for their study; THEY CAN ALSO INTERRACT WITH EACH OTHER OVER THE INTERNET,WHICH HELP BUILD FRIENDSHIPS AND SOCIAL CONNECTIONS.HOWEVER,WHY should NOT studentS be allowed to bring laptopS to school?PLEASE READ THE FOLLOWING.
I DON'T think studentS should bring laptopS to school.FIRSTLY,IT WOULD DIVERT THEIR ATTENTIONS ON STUDY.SECONDLY,这里不知道你想表什么?THIRDLY,StudentS might compare the PRICE of their computerS.
I did some research on internet about how university studentS use their laptop computerS ,and it shows THAT,MOST of the studentS spend 2 hours or more to watch movies,listen to music,play games and read novels ON their computers.Although their original intension is TO study; some of them indulge themselves in playing on-line games.Over 90% students go to bed AFTER 12 AM.The college studentS do so TOO.What's more,MOST OF MIDDLE SCHOOL STUDENTS LACK OF SELF-CONTROL.
改到这里,同学,你的essay有很多语法错误,很多不通顺,如果只是修改了语法,整篇文章的结构还是很有问题.如果你追求的是一篇A+的essay,我建议你把你要表达的点列出来,我在帮你重写.