英语作文批改how to succeed in a job interview?1、面试在求职过程中的作用2、取得面试成

英语作文批改
how to succeed in a job interview?
1、面试在求职过程中的作用
2、取得面试成功的因素：仪表、举止谈吐、能力、专业知识、自信、实事求是.
How to succeed in a job interview?
Nowadays ,having a intervier is animportant step for get a job .if you perform well in a job interview,theopportunity you get that job will become big ,otherwise become small.
What’s the factors of a successfulinterview.firstly,your appearance,appearance is always the initial impression youmake in interviewers’ brain.good appearance will increase the probability ofyour success.secondly,your ability,ability is the key of a brilliant .if youshow your ability perfectly in the interview,interviewers may pay attention toyou.thirdly,your confidence,confidence is really a good characteristic of oneperson.it will help you to do things smoothly and solve problems quickly.confidenceis also the focus that could attract interviers.
Professional knowledge,honest,talkingstyles and so on,they are all very important for job interview.if you want topass the interview,you should also show these to the interviews.
本人英语不好,希望大家能给我指出各种错误,

评语：作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；希望学术词汇的使用能更熟练一些,还要加强单词拼写的检查；层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词.
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1 How to succeed in a job interview? [教师点评]
[学习提示] 易混词汇: profession, job, occupation, trade, vocation, career, work, employment 均含“职业”之意.
profession: 以前常指要受过高等教育(尤指法律、医学和神学)才能获得的职业,现在一般指为谋生日的职业,尤指从事脑力劳动和受过专门训练,具有某种专业知识的职业.
job: 通常指一切有收入,不分脑力与体力运动,不论是否有技艺的长期或临时的职业.
occupation: 泛指任何一种职业,既不分什么行业,也不管是脑力还是体力劳动.
trade: 指需要有熟练技巧、技能和体力的职业.
vocation: 较正式用词,语气庄重,指长期从事,但不一定以此为主计的职业.
career: 指经过专门训练,终身愿意从事的职业.
work: 指任何种类的工作,也泛指职业.
employment: 指受雇于他人,领取工资以谋生计,有较固定工作的职业.
2.2 Nowadays , having a intervier is animportant step for get a job . [教师点评]
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查
[拼写错误] animportant 拼写错误,可替换选项为：an important, an-important, unimportant
[拼写错误] intervier 拼写错误,可替换选项为：interview, interviewer, interviews
[学习提示] 易混词汇: profession, job, occupation, trade, vocation, career, work, employment 均含“职业”之意.
profession: 以前常指要受过高等教育(尤指法律、医学和神学)才能获得的职业,现在一般指为谋生日的职业,尤指从事脑力劳动和受过专门训练,具有某种专业知识的职业.
job: 通常指一切有收入,不分脑力与体力运动,不论是否有技艺的长期或临时的职业.
occupation: 泛指任何一种职业,既不分什么行业,也不管是脑力还是体力劳动.
trade: 指需要有熟练技巧、技能和体力的职业.
vocation: 较正式用词,语气庄重,指长期从事,但不一定以此为主计的职业.
career: 指经过专门训练,终身愿意从事的职业.
work: 指任何种类的工作,也泛指职业.
employment: 指受雇于他人,领取工资以谋生计,有较固定工作的职业.
2.3 if you perform well in a job interview, theopportunity you get that job will become big , otherwise become small. [教师点评]
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[拼写错误] theopportunity 拼写错误,可替换选项为：the opportunity, the-opportunity, opportunity
[学习提示] 易混词汇: profession, job, occupation, trade, vocation, career, work, employment 均含“职业”之意.
profession: 以前常指要受过高等教育(尤指法律、医学和神学)才能获得的职业,现在一般指为谋生日的职业,尤指从事脑力劳动和受过专门训练,具有某种专业知识的职业.
job: 通常指一切有收入,不分脑力与体力运动,不论是否有技艺的长期或临时的职业.
occupation: 泛指任何一种职业,既不分什么行业,也不管是脑力还是体力劳动.
trade: 指需要有熟练技巧、技能和体力的职业.
vocation: 较正式用词,语气庄重,指长期从事,但不一定以此为主计的职业.
career: 指经过专门训练,终身愿意从事的职业.
work: 指任何种类的工作,也泛指职业.
employment: 指受雇于他人,领取工资以谋生计,有较固定工作的职业.
[推荐词汇] small的近义表达有minor/insignificant等.
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3.4 What's the factors of a successfulinterview. [教师点评]
[拼写错误] successfulinterview 拼写错误,可替换选项为：successful interview, successful-interview
3.5 firstly, your appearance, appearance is always the initial impression youmake in interviewers' brain. [教师点评]
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[拼写错误] youmake 拼写错误,可替换选项为：you make, you-make, toymaker
[学习提示] 易混词汇: appearance, look, face, aspect 均含事物或人的“外表,容貌”之意.
appearance: 普通用词,着重由总体产生的印象.
look: 普通用词,多用复数,可与appearance换用,但较口语化.
face: 侧重指容貌.
aspect: 书面用词,突出人或事物在某特定时间或地点时的外貌.
3.6 good appearance will increase the probability ofyour success. [教师点评]
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[拼写错误] ofyour 拼写错误,可替换选项为：of your, of-your, foyer
[学习提示] 易混词汇: appearance, look, face, aspect 均含事物或人的“外表,容貌”之意.
appearance: 普通用词,着重由总体产生的印象.
look: 普通用词,多用复数,可与appearance换用,但较口语化.
face: 侧重指容貌.
aspect: 书面用词,突出人或事物在某特定时间或地点时的外貌.
[批改提示] increase的近义表达有soar.
3.7 secondly, your ability, ability is the key of a brilliant . [教师点评]
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查
[形容词错误] 词性错误,请检查a brilliant.
如：Cooperation is a necessary.
[低频警示] the key of a brilliant 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: ability, capacity, capability, genius, talent, competence, faculty, gift, aptitude 均可表示人的“能力,才能”之意.
ability: 普通用词,指人先天的或学来的各种能力.
capacity: 侧重指人的潜在能力,通常不指体力,多指才智,尤指接受与领悟能力.
capability: 多用于人,指胜任某项具体工作的能力,也指本身具有、尚未发挥的潜在能力.常与of或for连用.
genius: 语气最强,指天赋的高度才能与智力.
talent: 着重指人某方面具有可发展和倍养的突出天赋才能,但语意比genius弱.
competence: 正式用词,侧重指令人满意的业务能力与水平,达到胜任某项工作等的要求.
faculty: 指特殊的才能或智力.
gift: 着重个人的天赋的才能或在某方面的显著本领,常暗含不能用一般规律作解释的意味.
aptitude: 多指先天或后天习得的运用自如的能力,常暗示接受能力强,能迅速掌握一种学术训练或艺术技巧.
3.8 if youshow your ability perfectly in the interview, interviewers may pay attention toyou. [教师点评]
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[拼写错误] toyou 拼写错误,可替换选项为：to you, to-you, toyboy
[拼写错误] youshow 拼写错误,可替换选项为：you show, you-show, yous how
[学习提示] 易混词汇: ability, capacity, capability, genius, talent, competence, faculty, gift, aptitude 均可表示人的“能力,才能”之意.
ability: 普通用词,指人先天的或学来的各种能力.
capacity: 侧重指人的潜在能力,通常不指体力,多指才智,尤指接受与领悟能力.
capability: 多用于人,指胜任某项具体工作的能力,也指本身具有、尚未发挥的潜在能力.常与of或for连用.
genius: 语气最强,指天赋的高度才能与智力.
talent: 着重指人某方面具有可发展和倍养的突出天赋才能,但语意比genius弱.
competence: 正式用词,侧重指令人满意的业务能力与水平,达到胜任某项工作等的要求.
faculty: 指特殊的才能或智力.
gift: 着重个人的天赋的才能或在某方面的显著本领,常暗含不能用一般规律作解释的意味.
aptitude: 多指先天或后天习得的运用自如的能力,常暗示接受能力强,能迅速掌握一种学术训练或艺术技巧.
3.9 thirdly, your confidence, confidence is really a good characteristic of oneperson. [教师点评]
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[拼写错误] oneperson 拼写错误,可替换选项为：one person, one-person, unperson
[学习提示] 易混词汇: quality, property, feature, characteristic, peculiarity, trait, attribute, character 均有“特性,特点,品质”之意.
quality: 最普通用词,既可指有形或无形的特性,又可指个性或共性的特征.
properity: 多指同类事物所共有的特性,一般不用于指人.
feature: 指事物突出引人注目的特点.多用来说明人的容貌特征或地理特征.
characteristic: 指某人或某物天生有别于他人或他物的内部特质或外表特征.
peculiarity: 指人或事物独具的或奇怪的特点,常带感情色彩.
trait: 多指人的性格、心情的特征,尤指先天秉赋的持久的行为模式或性格特征.
attribute: 通常指人主观赋予某事物的属性,可指典型事物.
character: 多指一类人或事物所具有的独特的典型的特征.
[批改提示] characteristic表示“特征,特点”.注意与character的区别.详情点击
3.10 it will help you to do things smoothly and solve problems quickly. [教师点评]
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 solve...problem 在教材中出现过 15482 次
SeeAlso: resolve problem1922,work_out problem457,figure_out problem82,work problem64,lick problem55,clear problem6
[学习提示] 易混词汇: problem, question, issue, matter 均含“问题”之意.
problem: 指客观上存在的、难以处理或难以理解的问题.
question: 通常指用口头或书面提出来要求回答或有待讨论解决的问题.
issue: 多指意见能达到一致的问题,着重争论或讨论中的问题.
matter: 含义不很具体,暗示人们考虑和关心的事和话题.
[批改提示] help近义表达有support/ assist/ aid
3.11 confidenceis also the focus that could attract interviers. [教师点评]
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[低频警示] attract...intervier 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[拼写错误] interviers 拼写错误,可替换选项为：interviews, interview's, interviewers
[拼写错误] confidenceis 拼写错误,可替换选项为：confidence is, confidence-is, confidences
[批改提示] attract近义表达有interest/ appeal to/ charm/ enchant/ fascinate
4.12 Professional knowledge, honest, talkingstyles and so on, they are all very important for job interview. [教师点评]
[名词错误] 冠词缺失,for job interview不规范,建议修改.
[拼写错误] talkingstyles 拼写错误,可替换选项为：talking styles, talking-styles, talentless
[学习提示] 易混词汇: frank, open, plain, blunt, honest, sincere, straightforward 都有“坦率,诚实”之意.
frank: 强调毫无保留地畅所欲言,不受任何约束.
open: 指不隐瞒自己的秘密,愿意向他人表露自己或公开暴露自己的缺点.
plain: 指直言不讳,毫不做作或故弄玄虚.
blunt: 指讲话坦白直率、不客气,但隐含不得体、不顾及他人感情等意味.
honest: 指遵守正直等道德准则.
sincere: 侧重指一个人出自内心地对某人某事表示一种诚意.
straightforward: 多用于答复、叙述等场合.指直截了当,不回避,或故弄玄虚.
[批改提示] very的近义表达有extremely, exceedingly, remarkably, intensely.
Improperly implemented, dials can be extremely difficult to manipulate.
如果设计不当,刻度盘将会非常难于操作.
Between 1890 and 1930 the woman suffrage movement became exceedingly militant.
一八九○年到一九三○年间妇女争取选举权运动变得非常激烈.
The surface of Mars is remarkably diverse.
火星的表面参差不齐.
He was so informed and intensely forceful.
他是那么见多识广,极了不起.
[高分词汇] important的近义表达有 crucial/essential.
crucial: extremely important/critical:
It is crucial that the report should be on time
essential: (something) very important/indispensable:
It is essential that you should take out a proper insurance.
It is essential for the applicant to wear a dark suit.
4.13 if you want topass the interview, you should also show these to the interviews. [教师点评]
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[拼写错误] topass 拼写错误,可替换选项为：to pass, to-pass, top ass
[低频警示] these to the interviews 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: appear, emerge, show, loom 均有“出现”之意.
appear: 强调公开露面,被看见.
emerge: 侧重缓缓出现的过程.
show: 语气较强,强调“露出来”.
loom: 指朦胧出现,好像从雾中浮现出来一样.
[批改提示] want的近义表达有intend,tend,lack,need.