帮我改下这篇演讲稿,可加可减,主要是病句语法错误,越多越高分,

帮我改下这篇演讲稿,可加可减,主要是病句语法错误,越多越高分,
I have a dream
Good afternoon everybody!It's my honor to speak here,and I am very glad to share my topicwith you.Then today I'd like to talk something about my dream-to be a world
famous pianist" ['pɪənɪst]
Peoplethrive [θraiv]
when they're doing the thing they love .I began to learn the piano at the age
of six .I was curious about it .During my primary school age ,I was been
forced to learn the piano by my family .It was a tough and unforgettable period ['pɪrɪəd].After several years' hard practice ,I
eventually understand the glamour ['ɡlæmə] of the piano and truly love it.
Dream hasa value only when it has something valuable as its object .There were many
world famous pianist in all ages ,such as Beethoven ,Mozart Richard clayderman
and marksim .They all saw the piano as the most valuable thing in their life.Not
only the enthusiasm [ɪn'θuzɪæzəm] they had but also their special talent and hard practice which make
them the world famous pianist.Form then on ,they could open concert and earn
money to live a happy life.
I have tobelieve in myself,That's the secret of success .I have every confidence in
realizing my dream .In my junior high school age ,I had attended several
Literature ['lɪtrətʃɚ] evening party in the cinema,where our
school had contracted for a whole day .In spite of the difficulties I will meet
in my way,I will try my best to overcome each of them.
I am aslow walker ,but I never walk backwards.As soon as I enter the college ,I
suddenly feel neverous.There are many subjects I must study well.Therefore,I
have to spend only a little time practicing playing the piano .Not only that ,
there are no pianos in this school,which means I have to practice at my home .Fortunately,I
am a local citizen and my home is not very far away from my school.
It'snever too late to be the person I want to be.Nothing can stop me from realizing
my dream.OK,thank you for listening that's all.

I have a dream
Good afternoon everybody! It is my honor to speak here, and I am very glad to share my topic with you. Today I would like to talk about my dream --to be a world famous pianist" ['pɪənɪst]
People thrive [θraiv] when they do the thing they love. I began to learn the piano at the age
of six. I was curious about it at first, so I started to learn. Little did I know about all the sweat I had to shed in the coming years, to slaowly and painstakingly hone my skills. It was a tough and unforgettable period ['pɪrɪəd] in primary school, when I detested practice. After several years of hard work, I eventually understood the glamour ['ɡlæmə] of the piano and fell in love with it.
Dreams have values only when they have something valuable as their reward .There were many
world famous pianists in all times ,such as Beethoven, Mozart, Richard Clayderman
and Marksim.They all saw the piano as the most valuable thing in their life. Beethoven loved the piano so much that not even turning deaf could deter him from composing. Not
only did they have the enthusiasm [ɪn'θuzɪæzəm], they also had their talent and hard work which made them the world famous pianists. After the hard work, they reaped their rewards, they could hold concerts and people would pay large sums of money to watch them. Royalty would also hire them for entertainment. This proves that dreams can also turn practical as the money they earned helped them provide fot their family.
I have to believe in myself because believing the secret of success. I have every confidence in
realizing my dream. In my junior high school age, I have attended several Literature ['lɪtrətʃɚ] evening parties in the cinema, where our school had contracted for a whole day . In spite of the difficulties and obstacles that will come my way, I will overcome each and every one of them.
I may be a slow walker, but I never walk backwards. As soon as I entered the college, I
suddenly felt nervous. There are many subjects I must juggle with. Therefore, I
the time I could set aside for piano practice becamse lesser. Not only that ,
there lack of pianos in this school means that I can only practise at home. Fortunately, I live near my school.
It'snever too late to be the person I want to be. Nothing can stop me from realizing
my dream. Thank you for listening and that is all.
帮你加了一些句子和一些字,是因为演讲时有些会听不到,需要其它字衬托.还有,记得 practice 是名词,practise 是动词 :) 就这样了 :)
再问： 你再看一遍你的回答有没有错误的地方，某些地方我觉得很奇怪。。。还有，有的词我们没学（我也不明白），我大一 修正完后分就给你了
再答： 哪些地方觉得奇怪？哪些词你不懂，告诉我，我尝试换一种说法 :)
再问： to slaowly and painstakingly hone my skills 总觉得这篇英语演讲和评委，观众没有互动性，让某些人觉得无聊，单调- - 解释完我改好直接去打印了。。。
再答： 对不起，应该是 'slowly and painstakingly hone my skills' 意思就是又慢又苦地练习，加强技能。要点互动的话，可以在 ‘good afternoon everybody' 后面加上 ’how many of you here play music instruments？‘ 让他们举举手这类的话。 :)