哪位神人帮我改一下英语作文,越详细越好,,明天交的,

哪位神人帮我改一下英语作文,越详细越好,,明天交的,

Good morning ,everyone.Today I'm going to say something about the movie UP,which is a very successful Disney cartoon film.It was written and directed by Peter Docter.
The reason I choose this film for my presentation is that I'm deeply tuoched by it and it tells about the importance of a dream.Therefore I want to share it with all of you.
A long time ago,the main character,Carl,a boy who was shy.One day,he met a girl ,Ellie,in an old house.Soon ,they became best friends.They shared the same dream too that is going to Paradise Fall.Then after getting along for a long time,Carl and Ellie got married eventually ,not only so ,they were also getting old together.
One day Ellie got ill and passed away,leaving Carl alone in the world.Carl didn't forget their dream .He deciede to realize this dream not only for himself but also for his beloved one Ellie.
As a consequence ,finally Carl made up his mind to visit Paradise Fall .
Carl made a home for himself.However it was not bulit by stones or woods.It was built by thousands of balloons ,which could fly in the sky.So it was really amazing actually.
Later on ,Carl came across a young man Russell ,and Russell became his passager.At first ,Carl disliked him.However,after they fighted with these bad peopleand experiencing this tough time together ,they beacme best friends .And finnaly ,they beated the bad person Charles and found the Paradise Fall.Paradise Fall was just a house with nothing special,but Carl understanded that what made us so passinate was the love we kept in our mind.
From this film I come to know dream is really very vital in our lives.If you have a dream ,then go and achieve it no matter what you are going to face let alone your shyness.So here ,I hope all of you can do something to realize your dream.That's all .Thank you .
再问： 亲，改的非常好，不会是哪复制的影评吧？别害我啊亲，要拿去考试的。。
再答： 怎么可能害你，是我自己写的啊。我是英语专业的啊。什么4,6级都过了，中口也过了，专业四级也过了。你要相信我的水品啊
再问： thank you very very very very very much ~~~~~~
再答： 那就采纳吧。也祝你取得好成绩啦。