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能不能帮我挑挑英语作文的毛病,分很低,我也不知道哪里错了,是时态还是动词还是句子不对?

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能不能帮我挑挑英语作文的毛病,分很低,我也不知道哪里错了,是时态还是动词还是句子不对?
作文如下
本人作文如下
Dear editor,
I'm writing to tell you about the discussion we've had about whether it is necessary for middle school students to carry mobile phones to school.
Opinions are divided on the questions.Most of students think we should carry the mobile phone to school .Because it is convinient to talk with parents and it is a fashion .But most of teachers are against the idea .They think students is young.They can t control themselves effectively .In the evening,student spend a lot of time playing games and sending email.What s more there are a lot of phone in the school .
In my opinion ,studying is very importent ,
能不能帮我挑挑英语作文的毛病,分很低,我也不知道哪里错了,是时态还是动词还是句子不对?
“Most of students think we should carry the mobile phone to school ”我觉得应该写成被允许we should be allow to;“carry”写成“bring”把“ convinientto”改成“convinient for”;把“the idea”改为“the opinion”;“They think students is young”中 students 是复数而 is是第三人称单数应该为 are;“student spend ”跟上面的问题一样;最后一句与全文不对调且importent写错应是important 以上是我个人观点不一定全对.