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8.In the “ship locks and water elevators”,the ship lock is used to cause the different water level.The ship is raised by buoyancy force.The water in the river can keep running and the water can keep at the same level is because of the nature water circulation.The water circulation is caused by the sun.As a result,we could say that the sun provides the energy for lifting the ship.It is situated in the middle of the vertical farm as shown in Figure 27.When it comes to ANSI project,there will also be a lock to control the water level in two different shafts.The elevator will also be lifted by the uplift force.To keep the water level,it is also intended to use the solar power.The “PV tree” will be helpful in gathering the energy from the sun.The energy will be provided to a pump under the creek.The pump is going to keep on pumping the water into the water stack so as to keep the water at the same level.This pump system is similar with the modern hydraulic elevator.
9.In “Tanner spring park,Portland” project,the Art Wall is built by a row of rail tracks.These hard sticks are connected by and can revolve around an axis.The movement is reflected in the water thus create an attractive sight.
10.Whether they are suitable to be applied in ANSI will depend on their function as well as the local situation including the climate and the culture.For example,the water and entertainment systems reviewed above can help ANSI waterscape to be more attractive and interesting,and there are not much climate and culture considerations,so they will be suitable to be applied in ANSI.
11.However,there’s no doubt that the panels of the PV tree on the vertical farm will be much bigger than the one on Milan.It is because the energy needed to pump around 100 m3 water will be much bigger than to operate 100w light.How big will the panels be is going to be calculated later during the design.
12.From the literature review,the researcher has learned some advance technology related to water and has studied some sample waterscape and energy efficient design projects.What’s more,how these water systems could be applied in ANSI has been analysed.In addition,the research gaps and problems have been found.
13.First of all,there have already been some advanced water systems used for water treatment,water utilization,and water celebration.Some of them can be applied directly in ANSI.However most of them need to be revised and integrated in order to have more functions,also,further design need to be done to integrate these systems to the building structure and the landscape structure.
14.In addition,few literatures have been found to describe how to do a whole sustainable water system design.As a result,this research is going to analyse the design process and will be contributing to design learning and teaching.
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第27段
In addition,the elevator will be lifted by the uplift force.
it is also intended to use the solar power.(去掉also)
第10段
much climate and culture considerations(many)
and(去掉and,重新起一句大写 Because) there are not much climate and culture considerations,so they will be suitable to be applied in ANSI.
第11段
It(that) is because the energy needed to pump around 100 m3 water will be much bigger(much more ) than to operate 100w light
第12段
From the literature review,the researcher has learned some advance technology(加复数) related to water and has(去掉and has 改逗号) studied some (a plenty of 代替some )sample waterscape and energy efficient design projects.some sample waterscape and energy efficient design projects
第13段
First of all,(去掉)(加Although,there have already been some advanced water systems used for water treatment,water utilization,and water celebration,(a few of them can be applied directly in ANSI.
However,(逗号)most of them need to be revised and integrated in order to have more(改comprehensive) functions.
also,(改大写 Also) further design need to be done to integrate these systems to the building structure and the landscape structure.
第14段
In addition (改为 further more )
As a result(改为 Therefore)
As a result,this research is going to analyse the design process and contribute (去掉 will)to design learning and teaching.