老师您好，这是我们高三模拟考试的英语作文题，我只得了13分,我总觉得批卷老师有点欺负我啊。。希望老师看看是不是真的就13

老师您好，这是我们高三模拟考试的英语作文题，我只得了13分,我总觉得批卷老师有点欺负我啊。。希望老师看看是不是真的就13分这样，点评一下

我的作文如下:I'm glad to hear that you took the first place in the English speech competition.Congratulations.As we all known,Rome is not built in a day,you must overcame lots of difficulties.Your effort is worth and you deserve it.The English study method is different vary from person to person.What about yours?Could you show me your experiences?At last,I hope you will get better grade last time.Looking forward to your reply.

解题思路： 理解文章要求；合理布局；注意遣词造句；内容全面；适当运用较高级的句型。
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你好，分析如下 I'm glad to hear that you took the first place in the English speech competition.Congratulations.As we all known,Rome is not built in a day,you must overcame lots of difficulties.Your effort is worth and you deserve it.The English study method is different vary from person to person.What about yours?Could you show me your experiences?At last,I hope you will get better grade last time.Looking forward to your reply. 优点：要点都有所涉及；能运用定语，名词性从句等较高级的句型；能运用effort，deservevary，look forward to 等较正式的高频词语。 需改善：字数需增加；文章应合理布局---分段；双语翻译用词需考虑；句子结构有待完善；研究英语句子的表达形式。 修改如下： I'm glad to hear that you have taken the first place in the English speech contest.Congratulations to you.As we all known,Rome is not built in a day,you must have overcame lots of difficulties.Your efforts are worth it. I think it is the way you learn English that accounts for your success,especially you are always sticking to the habit.Could you share your experience with us? I will appreciate it if you offer it. Now ，from the bottom of my heart，I show you my best best wishes，hoping you will get a better grade next time.Looking forward to your reply. 愿你满意，异议来信。
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