帮忙修改下语法Nowadays,more and more eat fast food thatsuch as McDo

帮忙修改下语法
Nowadays,more and more eat fast food thatsuch as McDonald’s,KFC burger king and some other snack bar.Because of thedevelopment of the society,busy work lets some people choose to eat fast foodto solve their hunger problems.
The greatest benefit of fast food isconvenient.you are ordering fast food save you more time or people who worklong hours can pick up phone and order takeaway.In addition,fast fooddelicious taste is recognized by everybody.You can enjoy the yummy food forany suitable situation.
However,fast food also has the obvious disadvantage.We know fast food is unhealthy forour body.If we eat more and more junk food maybe we will get fat.We can guessmany materials are not fresh in the process.And then,some people choose to addsome chemicals to make food keep for a long time.On the other hand,thepackaging is non-biodegradable which must damages environment.Always eat fastfood is expensive by consumer.
Ingeneral,fast food is a good solution for those who have no time to cook,butwe should care about our health and try to eat fast food as little as possible.

Nowadays, more and more 【people prefer】eating fast food 【,】such as McDonald’s, KFC burger king and some other snack bar. Because of the development of【 our 】society, 【busy work lets some people choose to eat fast food to solve their hunger problems.这句话太中国化了改为： some people choose to eat fast food to save their time in such a busy world】

The greatest benefit of fast food is convenient. you 【are ordering 改为order陈述这件事用一般现在时】fast food【 to 】save【 your你的时间 用主格】 more time or people who work long hours can pick up phone and order takeaway. In addition, delicious taste【 of表所属】 fast food is recognized by everybody. You can enjoy the yummy food for any suitable situation.
However,fast food also has the obvious disadvantage【s】.【 We know fast food 这几个单词改为which 更好 引导非限制定语从句 不过不改也不错】is unhealthy for our body. If we eat more and more junk food【,】 maybe we will get fat. We can guess many materials are not fresh in the process. And then, some people choose to add some chemicals to make food keep for a long time. On the other hand, the packaging is non-biodegradable which must damages environment. 【Always eat fastfood is expensive by consumer这句话有问题 看不懂你要表达的意思.如果你想要表达：对于消费者来说 经常吃快餐是很昂贵的 的话用这个句型更好：it is expensive for consumer to eat fastfood everyday】.
In general, fast food is a good 【solution 改为way】for those who have no time to cook, but we should care about our health and try to eat fast food as 【little改为few】 as possible.