搜搜考试网望英语达人帮我改正我写的书面表达,做些评价.
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望英语达人帮我改正我写的书面表达,做些评价.
My future
My name is Dennis.In ten years I will be tall,strong and have straight I will be strong,I won not cry that because some little thingshair .I will become a police officer in beijing.It is my deam.My favorite place is bejing.It is the capital of china.I will be good at swimming and table tennis.I will have two children in my family.It is great.My future will be more beautiful.
My future
My name is Dennis.In ten years I will be tall,strong and have straight I will be strong,I won not cry that because some little thingshair .I will become a police officer in beijing.It is my deam.My favorite place is bejing.It is the capital of china.I will be good at swimming and table tennis.I will have two children in my family.It is great.My future will be more beautiful.
如果你是小学或者初中还算可以了,但是有以下问题：
1、beijing应该写成Beijing,地名第一个字要大写.
2、句式比较简单都是些简单句,如果你能力提高可以尝试一下表语从句,定语从句,或者同位语从句.
3、就是你这些语句里面还要注意逗号,这些.In ten years 后加逗号,看起来结构清晰.
4.注意时态的运用,比如说 I will be tall,strong and have straight ,你可以改成 I 'm tall,strong and have straight .用一般现在时表将来时,还有就是在写这些句子的时候注意,情感或者细节的描写,比如strong 变成stronger这样,你可以表现你未来的状态或者现在的心情.多加一些完成时态这些.还有就是同样表达一个意思尝试用不同的词或句型去同意替换,你看你这篇文章一表达：将,就用will
5、句式用被动比较好My favorite place is bejing可以改成Beijing atractive me and I love it.
多背一下,然后仿写~
1、beijing应该写成Beijing,地名第一个字要大写.
2、句式比较简单都是些简单句,如果你能力提高可以尝试一下表语从句,定语从句,或者同位语从句.
3、就是你这些语句里面还要注意逗号,这些.In ten years 后加逗号,看起来结构清晰.
4.注意时态的运用,比如说 I will be tall,strong and have straight ,你可以改成 I 'm tall,strong and have straight .用一般现在时表将来时,还有就是在写这些句子的时候注意,情感或者细节的描写,比如strong 变成stronger这样,你可以表现你未来的状态或者现在的心情.多加一些完成时态这些.还有就是同样表达一个意思尝试用不同的词或句型去同意替换,你看你这篇文章一表达：将,就用will
5、句式用被动比较好My favorite place is bejing可以改成Beijing atractive me and I love it.
多背一下,然后仿写~